CREATIVE WRITING WORKSHOP CRITIQUE

This is a critique of a young promising future genre writer; Daniel

• The writer describes the setting exceptionally well. He gives character to the setting by using creative metaphors to describe it,"as if the life of the city had been drained with the setting of the sun" The style he employs to write the setting draws the reader in instead of boring the reader about useless info about a setting. The writer has a fluid style in describing setting
• It is obvious that the writer is well-versed in the genre he is writing about. He describes the elements such as weapons "sword and mace." and dress "rusty maille under his rags." This proves that the writer knows what he's talking about thus rendering the suspension of disbelief to be credible and authentic in the portrayal of the story
• However, the writer makes minor and careless grammatical errors with tenses. He starts out the narrative with using the past tense but tends to divert to present tense a number of times "emerge from their dark holes when the night rises"
• The other minor error the writer makes is "There were dark, dangerous men dressed in a dirty tunic" I believe what the writer wants to describes the dress of both men therefore he should use "dressed in dirty tunics" instead. This is just a minor error of singular/plural.
• Another weak point in the writing is that the writer might sometimes tend to put in information which is not relevant to the flow of the story. However this is subjective, because that information given in this paragraph such as the skills of Jarl could explicate further turn of events in the story
• Overall, it is an exceptional piece of work, for it does show high caliber of someone who is well-read and knows a genre well. The writer has a good style in writing because he makes the reader believe they are at the setting of the story and that everything is plausible

Arththi Sathananthar

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